Criticize this

[Complexion]

I have a favor to request from you.

We've been kicking it for a minute and I'd like you to be a critic of my writing and how I push the pen. You can include what I'm speaking on if you wish but the main thing I'm wondering is are the points I'm making and the message they send to your awareness.

Is it clear and lucid? Or are they verbose and confusing?

I'd appreciate you being honest and direct in the true Coli spirit and rest assured I wouldn't accept $7435 to vanquish you as my Coli nemesis if say some mean things as I'm thinking of taking this all to the next level and would appreciate your perspective on the Game I've been kicking as well as the medium of the message in order to be more effective as I'm just doing whats natural and would like to know how that filters into your consciousness.

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[Elle Seven]

Some posters I read for a laugh. Some posters I read for the messages. Yours are in the latter.

 

[MMS]

I have a favor to request from you.

We've been kicking it for a minute and I'd like you to be a critic of my writing and how I push the pen. You can include what I'm speaking on if you wish but the main thing I'm wondering is are the points I'm making and the message they send to your awareness.

Is it clear and lucid? Or are they verbose and confusing?

I'd appreciate you being honest and direct in the true Coli spirit and rest assured I wouldn't accept $7435 to vanquish you as my Coli nemesis if say some mean things as I'm thinking of taking this all to the next level and would appreciate your perspective on the Game I've been kicking as well as the medium of the message in order to be more effective as I'm just doing whats natural and would like to know how that filters into your consciousness.

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This is alittle ambiguous but I'll let you see what the app Hemingway would say to you with my edits. Why do you seek criticism?

Hemingway Editor

Hemingway Editor makes your writing bold and clear.

hemingwayapp.com

I have a favor to request from you.

We've been kicking it for a minute and I'd like you to be a critic of my writing and how I push the pen. You can include what I'm speaking on if you wish but the main thing I'm wondering is are the points I'm making and the message they send to your awareness.

Is it clear and lucid? Or are they verbose and confusing?

I'd appreciate you being honest and direct in the true Coli spirit and rest assured I wouldn't accept $7435 to vanquish you as my Coli nemesis if say some mean things as I'm thinking of taking this all to the next level and would appreciate your perspective on the Game I've been kicking as well as the medium of the message in order to be more effective as I'm just doing whats natural and would like to know how that filters into your consciousness.

It said those parts were confusing. So here is my edited version:

I have a favor to request from you.

We've been kicking it for a minute and I'd like you to be a critic of my writing and how I push the pen. Include what I'm speaking about if you wish. The main thing I'm wondering is the points I'm making and the message they send to your awareness.

Is it clear and lucid? Or are they verbose and confusing?

I appreciate you being honest and direct in the true Coli spirit. Rest assured I wouldn't accept $7435 to vanquish you as my Coli nemesis if I say some mean things. I'm taking this all to the next level and would appreciate your perspective on the Game I've been kicking. The medium of the message will be more effective in doing what's natural.

Subtlety isn't always trickery, but sometimes it can steer the thought of what you mean closer to what comes out.

 

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[Complexion]

Subtlety isn't always trickery, but sometimes it can steer the thought of what you mean closer to what comes out.

True but sometimes what you intend to come out is run on sentences for the artistic effect. Thats what I'm wondering and apps can't comprehend hence asking humans as I want to know what happens in your head from decoding these glyphs the way they're arranged.

Some posters I read for a laugh. Some posters I read for the messages. Yours are in the latter.

Do the words lead you directly to the point or into the vicinity where you must then make your own effort to comprehend the intent?

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[MMS]

True but sometimes what you intend to come out is run on sentences for the artistic effect. Thats what I'm wondering and apps can't comprehend hence asking humans as I want to know what happens in your head from decoding these glyphs the way they're arranged.



Do the words lead you directly to the point or into the vicinity where you must then make your own effort to comprehend the intent?



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We are living in a world of illusion

I don’ t understand nothing going on in here this thread is an illusion hell "so get out ya feels" :hug: We are living in a world of illusion

www.thecoli.com

 

[Orbital-Fetus]

I'm picking up what you're putting down.

 

[Complexion]

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We are living in a world of illusion

I don’ t understand nothing going on in here this thread is an illusion hell "so get out ya feels" :hug: We are living in a world of illusion

www.thecoli.com

Thats pretty much what I mean as you're obviously saying something that speaks to you but there is no resonance whatsoever to me in any of it. We spoke of this before when I said I'm all about practical spirituality with gnosis and direct experience whereas you seem to be the opposite and more orthodox, all about quoting guys who were notarized way back when and allergic to being straight forward.

What I wondered was do people reading what I type get something from it on The Coli or are they to them as all those scriptural quotes you punt are to me? Like Charlies Browns teacher honking away and not speak my mystic language of intuition as here is nothing that appeals in the dryness as its not my dialect or interest.

Many flavors, many recipes, all using the same ingredients. Some are freshly cooked, others a long time frozen and you've got to thaw to digest...

I'm picking up what you're putting down.

I'm considering turning it up a few notches and releasing previously private topics via the web because I feel I've done enough outlining of the Game as I see it. Any more of this would be a retread which is functionally worthless as that energy is best applied to something fresh and creative.

One thing I will say thats of interest is how obvious its been getting of late that we're in a simulated reality with this influx of AI, transhumanism and the general shift in vibration compared to how it was previously. Truly, none of this is what it seems because it plays out inside your awareness at the most basic level ergo your true power and potential is immense but its kept well hidden through layers of conditioned ignorance hence know thyself aka the Path of Power always offers immense dividends.

Even a couple of years ago when I mentioned the Game of Souls it was "Uh, huh, sure" whereas now a lot more folk appear to see it as probable because of how things are moving and the only logical conclusion is it all just loops around on itself. Again and again and again.

 

[TL15]

 

[Sonic Boom of the South]

A serpent came to me in a vision and spoke these words:

Sator
Arepo
Tenet
Opera
Rotas

Then swallowed it's own tail and disappeared, only to rebirth itself!

 

[Orbital-Fetus]

I'm considering turning it up a few notches

 

[Amo Husserl]

Some people aren't known to what you are talking about. I had to make my message palatable.
Clear message, clear understanding. Anybody disagree the opps. 2+2=4. They say no, they a snake.
Details ain't convincing. The most "knowledge" they want is from Sunday service. Your writing for a specific group.
Then it's reference frames people ain't got correct lenses for. They wearin' sunglasses in the dark b'cause somebody told 'em it was 'dope'.
Issa whole way I could take this...