zayk35
Superstar
I like the framework you got going for the story, but it isn't rich enough. Too dry and bland.... you need to bring life and character to the text..... You may need an editorial resd from @General Mills for the Memorial Day 2000 story..... looking forward to the endeavors....
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I'll do it some justice gonna Holla at some of the characters for some more details from their perspectives. To bring out this richness you seek. Some of those ppls involvement will bring some literal "Seasoning Salt" to that one.