Critique my song Y'all

Would you jam is in the whip?

  • It's aight but hell nah bruh

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Inf1ne

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I like imagine better
That atw shyt on the intercom the best thing to hear.rns
Work on not being monotone and u straight
 

Maddmike

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You don't sound confident at all... the purpose of being a rapper rapping what you rapping is I'm supposed to be convinced you a str8 up "tyrant" like you say you are when I just think you reading off a paper...develop a signature flow breh...You have zero emotional pattern in your voice...every line has to mean something and in your case it doesn't..being a rapper is more than just spitting lines. You have to convince your audience...You do that by changing pitch.
 

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Intro is too long...and wack honestly....and "fukking on your mom" is wack. What are six? Flow needs work and I'm not saying the lyrics are wack...additionaly, your adlibs are wack tbh....think young jeezy if you gone use them. Cause to me he is the best a ablib artist out there
 
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I was out after that part
Intro is too long...and wack honestly....and "fukking on your mom" is wack. What are six? Flow needs work and I'm not saying the lyrics are wack...additionaly, your adlibs are wack tbh....think young jeezy if you gone use them. Cause to me he is the best a ablib artist out there
It's not supposed to be taken seriously it's more playful
 
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Record this professionally and shoot a dope viral vid and you should be good money. That playful shyt is in right now.
 
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