Lyricism. All criticism welcomed.

[DialeKt757]

Yes, I know my breath control could've been better. Blame it on the meds. Just listen and give me feedback.

 

[b@squ1@t]

holy shyt are you a hoarder?

do you live at your mothers house?...is she a hoarder?

 

[SunZoo]

You can rap, room for improvement but you got a solid foundation. Keep at it, clean that fukking closet or whatever that is.

 

[observe]

Internet nerds always think they can rap, until they step in a cipher and I kill em with fatal blows

 

[blackslash]

My freestyles better than ya writtens b

 

[DialeKt757]

You can rap, room for improvement but you got a solid foundation. Keep at it, clean that fukking closet or whatever that is.

Thanks for the feedback. Also this was recorded at a friend of mine's crib, and the owners are hoarders. I don't live there, lol.

 

[DialeKt757]

My freestyles better than ya writtens b

Stop the madness.

 

[DialeKt757]

holy shyt are you a hoarder?

do you live at your mothers house?...is she a hoarder?

This was rec at someone else's house. They are the hoarders, not me bruh.

 

[Redwing80]

You got the flow

 

[DialeKt757]

Bump.

 

[b@squ1@t]

do your thing breh...

 

[JasonSJackson]

The devil dont love you

 

[Im Kemet Rocky & I like penis]

foh cac

 

[Hondajettz]

all three of your verses were dope but I think your second verse should be on another another song. It would make the song perfect in my opinion. 3 verses drags it out too long. Really dope hook also!!!! P

 

[hex]

Yes, I know my breath control could've been better. Blame it on the meds. Just listen and give me feedback.

I gotta applaud how quickly you recorded this after the earth quake.

Fred.