Lyricism. All criticism welcomed.

[DialeKt757]

Not bad, but don't waste anymore time putting out these kind of videos. You should get some real recording equipment and put this on wax.

I feel you. This song is actually gonna be the first real video I record. I was scramblin for a little bit, but I'm good now.

 

[Huellz Santana]

lyrics are good but you gotta work on your delivery.

also, you shouldn't come in asking for feedback but have qualifiers like "I know the breath control was bad but..."
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[DialeKt757]

lyrics are good but you gotta work on your delivery.

also, you shouldn't come in asking for feedback but have qualifiers like "I know the breath control was bad but..."
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I clearly stated that I was fukked up when I recorded it. You write a song like that and do it in one take, js. When it's recorded it'll sound much better, of course.

 

[DialeKt757]

Bump.

 

[DialeKt757]

Apparently nikkas can't keep me out of their mouths. You can't tell me this song isn't dope.

 

[Knicksman20]

Yes, I know my breath control could've been better. Blame it on the meds. Just listen and give me feedback.

To you for welcoming criticism fam. Like someone said work on that hunger in your voice. You gotta make people feel what you're saying & convey that through your music. Also you might wanna slow down your flow so you can emphasize your words more. You probably been told this but you look like Mike Beasley

 

[DialeKt757]

To you for welcoming criticism fam. Like someone said work on that hunger in your voice. You gotta make people feel what you're saying & convey that through your music. Also you might wanna slow down your flow so you can emphasize your words more. You probably been told this but you look like Mike Beasley

LMAO nah, that's the first time. I was actually on some pills at that time, but I feel what you're saying. I recently did this at two different competitions with no problems. Appreciate the feedback though, bruh. Thanks for taking the actual time to listen.

 

[XII]

Apparently nikkas can't keep me out of their mouths. You can't tell me this song isn't dope.

What have you done since this?

 

[DialeKt757]

What have you done since this?

I've got more shyt. I can't find a decent studio at all around here. I wasn't kidding when I said nikkas be fukkin up my damn vocals. Almmost on purpose I feel like. My city is a crab in the bucket one, and it pisses me off. I'll be heading up to Newark soon to shoot some videos and record my whole album. Check out my soundcloud if you want. I'm gonna re record everything with a more polished sound, along with a couple of beat changes. I appreciate the listen bruh

 

[the rhyme king]

sup @DialeKt757 how u been fam want to talk rhyme schemes ?

 

[DialeKt757]

sup @DialeKt757 how u been fam want to talk rhyme schemes ?

What you wanna know?

 

[newarkhiphop]

I've got more shyt. I can't find a decent studio at all around here. I wasn't kidding when I said nikkas be fukkin up my damn vocals. Almmost on purpose I feel like. My city is a crab in the bucket one, and it pisses me off. I'll be heading up to Newark soon to shoot some videos and record my whole album. Check out my soundcloud if you want. I'm gonna re record everything with a more polished sound, along with a couple of beat changes. I appreciate the listen bruh

Careful out there on Newark, make sure you get your hood pass from @Newark88 and @skeetsinternal first

 

[director_of_bands]

the vibe, feeling, and arrangement of the song is waaaaaaaay more important than lyrics breh...most people don't have the attention span no more to appreciate lyricism

 

[the rhyme king]

What you wanna know?

nothing i just wanted to talk about them u down for it ?

 

[DialeKt757]

Careful out there on Newark, make sure you get your hood pass from @Newark88 and @skeetsinternal first

nikka I roll with #EAMG with my nikka M Dot Baggz and everyone from 400 block. Even SRT10MG fukks with me. Shotgun Suge and all them nikkas. I'm solid my nikka