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you need to work on your flow. Its not on the beat. Try to mimic some simple flows and then when you got that down work your way up to speed. Also catchy music has variation everything is not 100 words per second. It needs to have a good, understandable pace, and slight variation from that pace so people don't get bored
 

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you need to work on your flow. Its not on the beat. Try to mimic some simple flows and then when you got that down work your way up to speed. Also catchy music has variation everything is not 100 words per second. It needs to have a good, understandable pace, and slight variation from that pace so people don't get bored
:what: nikka, gtofh with that dumb shyt. I stay on beat. Just because it's not a simple, dumb ass flow like Lil B's (who you clearly like, having bytchmob as your sig :mjlol:) YOU can't understand what I'm saying.
 

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:what: nikka, gtofh with that dumb shyt. I stay on beat. Just because it's not a simple, dumb ass flow like Lil B's (who you clearly like, having bytchmob as your sig :mjlol:) YOU can't understand what I'm saying.

Do you want constructive criticism or not? You're going 100 miles per hour the whole song. Speeding up doesn't hide being off beat. Flow has nothing to do with content. Speed it up, slow it down, go back to the baseline. Change the tone up a little. You have to keep the listener entertained.
 

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Do you want constructive criticism or not? You're going 100 miles per hour the whole song. Speeding up doesn't hide being off beat. Flow has nothing to do with content. Speed it up, slow it down, go back to the baseline. Change the tone up a little. You have to keep the listener entertained.
Smh THIS nikka...I changed my cadence more than a few times. You don't know anything about rhyme schemes, bruh. You couldn't point out a multi if your life depended on it. I can tell you didn't listen to shyt I was saying. Know what? I'm not responding to shyt you say, cause what you just said was asinine beyond words. :camby:YOU have no room telling me shyt about my flow when you listen to Lil B. Take your skinny jeans calling them "fitted" wearing ass out of here.
 

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@LordTaskForce is


basicly saying "dumb it down"
lmao, No, bruh. Nothing I said was complicated. It just sounds like it is cause of everything I'm rhyming. Sorry if I'm not a Speak and Spell rapper. I like to bring it back to the REAL roots of lyricism. I never had a problem following anything anyone was saying in any song. So me saying "The Purple Haze I burn for days got me so high I could hurdle planes" is complex? LMAO Stop it man. If you can't understand shyt like that, then you really need to pick up a book and put the blunt down.
 

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Smh THIS nikka...I changed my cadence more than a few times. You don't know anything about rhyme schemes, bruh. You couldn't point out a multi if your life depended on it. I can tell you didn't listen to shyt I was saying. Know what? I'm not responding to shyt you say, cause what you just said was asinine beyond words. :camby:YOU have no room telling me shyt about my flow when you listen to Lil B. Take your skinny jeans calling them "fitted" wearing ass out of here.

Never said anything about rhyme schemes or content but variation is important (like other posters said, delivery needs work). You ask for feedback and curse people out that tell you what they think. Good luck, friend.
 

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Never said anything about rhyme schemes or content but variation is important (like other posters said, delivery needs work). You ask for feedback and curse people out that tell you what they think. Good luck, friend.


Listen to that, and then tell me I don't have variation.
 

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Are you serious, my nikka? Do you really believe in yourself? :scust:

Why the fukk wouldn't I? So I'm supposed to tell myself that I suck, when clearly I'd kill most of the people you know lyrically? I'm not supposed to have any confidence in my work? What are YOU doing with your life that could possibly give you a life most people only dream of? Just being a hating ass nikka cause you're watching someone else chase their dreams, and your time for anything has passed you? Are you really that mad, nikka? Or are you gonna be another fakkit so concerned about trying to down something positive I'm doing with my life cause yours is fukked? Would you rather I be out committing crimes? You're a fukking idiot. Hop off of my nuts and my thread, you bytch ass nikka. :pacspit:
 
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Why the fukk wouldn't I? So I'm supposed to tell myself that I suck, when clearly I'd kill most of the people you know lyrically? I'm not supposed to have any confidence in my work? What are YOU doing with your life that could possibly give you a life most people only dream of? Just being a hating ass nikka cause you're watching someone else chase their dreams, and your time for anything has passed you? Are you really that mad, nikka? Or are you gonna be another fakkit so concerned about trying to down something positive I'm doing with my life cause yours is fukked? Would you rather I be out committing crimes? You're a fukking idiot. Hop off of my nuts and my thread, you bytch ass nikka. :pacspit:
You think those asthma attack double time bars are hot, nikka? FOR REAL IN REAL LIFE DO YOU RAP IN FRONT OF PEOPLE ? Do they approve of you? Who thinks you're nice in real life, bro?
 

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the lyrical content is there :obama: but can you produce a hit single is the question? :ohhh:

a single with meaning :mjcry:a single the majority can relate to a single with backbone and substance :mjcry: not generics and gimmicks :mjcry: only time will tell :mjcry:

salute to newport news/kiln creek though :salute:
 
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