Some chase the dollar, some chase the dream...

[vaudevillevillain]

I been Tryna find the fine line in between
Left brain sayin 'eat' right brain sayin 'art'
Tug of war in my thoughts, don't know where to start
I shut the voice in my head up and follow my heart
Let my soul bleed as I proceed
With the higher forces, you just force it, you should forfeit
Couldn't move me with a forklift

Some new shyt I'm cooking up, what u think brehs

 

[the cool]

Pretty elementary lyrics tbh

You rhymed heart and start

 

[vaudevillevillain]

Pretty elementary lyrics tbh

You rhymed heart and start

thanks breh

 

[kuts]

You should record something then post imo bc delivery/flow/beat all contribute significantly to a song.

If it's just supposed to be poetry then I would work on the concept some more and make it more meaningful/personal...rn it sounds generic. Also, I agree with the lyrics being elementary in the sense that you use a lot of simple words with simple rhymes. My recommendation is to look at Nas' lyrics from NY State of Mind or It Ain't Hard to Tell.

 

[A Tribe Called Quest ™]

I wanna hear some street shyt fukk is this pandering hipster rap

 

[Poh SIti Dawn]

its ok