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Check Out My Verse to Jay-Z's "Heaven" (let me know if I'm garbage)
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LogicFirst
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The Dust King
A Childrens Story
I didn't think it was as bad as others said but more than nitpicking your flow and choice of words it sounded like halfway thru you lost interest in the rhyme. keep the same intensity
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LogicFirst
Banned
good lookin
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Listening....
It's cool, just need to make the flow smoother and the delivery more natural, the lyrics are decent.