Why He Say This and Not That? Lyrics You Woulda Changed

[Avisible Man]

Kodak Black on Super Gremlin.

The hook:

Now is not safe for yoooou
You switch like a p*ssy lil bytch


The last bar should’ve been:
Now is not safe for yoooou
You switch like a bytch do

Specially when u consider:

We coulda been superstars
Remember we were jacking cars


He coulda completed the couplet but he didn't. I woulda cut the p*ssy out and changed it to this:

We coulda been superstars
Remember we were jacking cars
Now is not safe for yooou
You switch like a lil bytch dooou

He coulda said "do" the regular way without drawing it out like he did with yooou in the prior line in order to echo the way he ended it originally with the short, monosyllabic "bytch."

 

[Avisible Man]

It's cool to hear from y'all. Some of the songs y'all have suggested, I've heard, some I haven't, and some I haven't heard in a minute. So it's cool to go back and listen to them and try to implement ur changes and some of my own.

 

[Breh Obama]

One thing about a Coli thread… 2 people gon start randomly arguing for no reason

 

[Avisible Man]

50 Cent's second verse on I Gotta Win from War Angel LP. The lyrics in question:

This movie's a rerun, you seen this before
She used a vibrator and she suck on your boy
I stand out like a sore thumb, I'm hard to ignore



He shoulda reversed "sore thumb" and switched it to "thumb sore." I know nobody ever says they have a "thumb sore;" they say they have a "sore thumb." But, in this case, saying "thumb sore" woulda maintained a better rhythm and been more connected with the end rhyme / assonance of the prior lines.

How I woulda said it:

This movie's a rerun, you seen this before
She used a vibrator and she suck on your boy
I stand out like a thumb sore, I'm hard to ignore

 

[1thouwow]

I would have said:

Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for any? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, one, two, three, let's get it


Instead of the original:
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for any? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, one, two, three, let's go

 

[Avisible Man]

I would have said:

Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for any? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, one, two, three, let's get it


Instead of the original:
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for any? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, why would I switch out a dime for a penny? (Gang, gang)
Woo, woo, one, two, three, let's go

That's a perfect change and a good example of not needing every word to be a perfect rhyme. That "let's go" with the hard "o" sound really kills the rhythm. "Let's get it," while it's not a perfect rhyme with "penny" or "any," it does maintain the assonance (vowel sound) and creates a "slant rhyme." I know the "A" vowel sound is different from the "E" sound, but not the way it's pronounced down south and on the song, so you're change woulda been way better.

 

[1thouwow]

That's a perfect change and a good example of not needing every word to be a perfect rhyme. That "let's go" with the hard "o" sound really kills the rhythm. "Let's get it," while it's not a perfect rhyme with "penny" or "any," it does maintain the assonance (vowel sound) and creates a "slant rhyme." I know the "A" vowel sound is different from the "E" sound, but not the way it's pronounced down south and on the song, so you're change woulda been way better.

Appreciate it

 

[dezert_storm]

“I missed your wake not cause I'm fake
cause I hate to see somebody so great in that way” - Nas “We Will Survive”

I would’ve changed it to “I hate to see somebody so great in that state”

 

[Avisible Man]

“I missed your wake not cause I'm fake
cause I hate to see somebody so great in that way” - Nas “We Will Survive”

I would’ve changed it to “I hate to see somebody so great in that state”

Saying it your way woulda made a perfect rhyme. Even the greats make mistakes.

You can see why Nas chose to end the line with "way" cuz it forms a couplet with the next end rhyme, which is "way."

I missed your wake not cause I'm fake
Cause I hate to see somebody so great in that way
I would of stayed so long with so much to say

But, with the way that he was emphasizing the "Ake" and "are / eat" sounds. I agree with you that it woulda sounded better your way and still woulda maintained the long A sound with the next line.

 

[Hitman's Shades]

Kind of a stretch but I noticed something hearing this today.

DMX Get at Me Dog:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
I'll form the head, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

"I'll form the head" (pause) is from Voltron, not Transformers. No one ever noticed that, but I might have changed it to:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
More than meets the eye, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

Nerd shyt yes, but I noticed it.

 

[KnickstapeCity]

Kind of a stretch but I noticed something hearing this today.

DMX Get at Me Dog:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
I'll form the head, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

"I'll form the head" (pause) is from Voltron, not Transformers. No one ever noticed that, but I might have changed it to:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
More than meets the eye, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

Nerd shyt yes, but I noticed it.

 

[up in here]

“I'm bein watched by snake eyes
Peep them shed skin plenty times
Surrounded by crash dummies and empty minds
Get your shyt together Dunn, see between the lines
Stay awoke, to the ways of the wickedest kind
Infamous - cause of the way, I write rhymes
Plus my story's more foul than your newborn eatin swine” - Prodigy

I always thought he shoulda say “stay awake” not “stay awoke” because it fits the ryhme scheme better, it rhymes with “snake “ which he already said and it flows better into the next part of the sentence. But, “stay awoke” carries a heavier meaning and P was a deep thinker and way ahead of the times, so it makes sense he said that instead

 

[Avisible Man]

Kind of a stretch but I noticed something hearing this today.

DMX Get at Me Dog:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
I'll form the head, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

"I'll form the head" (pause) is from Voltron, not Transformers. No one ever noticed that, but I might have changed it to:

"Get the bytches, and I'll commit the crime (uh-huh)
And when it's on, we transform like Optimus Prime
More than meets the eye, roll out, let's make it happen (let's go)"

Nerd shyt yes, but I noticed it.

That reminds me of the scene from "Spider-Man: Far From Home" where JB Smoove says that the Elementals have "joined forces like the Power Rangers!" Mr. Harrington yells at him "You're thinking of Voltron! Voltron! You're thinking of Voltron!"



I like your change a lot, specially when u consider how DMX used the Optimus Prime saying "roll out" (minus the preceding Autobots). Add that to the fact that you create assonance with the repetition of the soft i sound found in Prime and Eye.

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I remember another mistake like that by Action Bronson on "Hot Pepper." He says:

For many years my mind been going off the deep end. Like Tom Hanks with the soccer ball...

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I'm pretty sure that Bronsolino is referencing Tom Hanks in "Castaway," where he was stranded on an island after a plane crash. His only companion was Wilson, who was a... volleyball.

I also remember a Cam line from Leave Me Alone Pt. 2:

I spend days on Kawasakis, nights with Lewinsky
But l'm the like the lce Man,
Michael Kuklinski

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Cam, you my guy, doggie, but the Iceman was Richard Kuklinski. Honest mistake tho. Those names are easy to confuse.

 

[Avisible Man]

“I'm bein watched by snake eyes
Peep them shed skin plenty times
Surrounded by crash dummies and empty minds
Get your shyt together Dunn, see between the lines
Stay awoke, to the ways of the wickedest kind
Infamous - cause of the way, I write rhymes
Plus my story's more foul than your newborn eatin swine” - Prodigy

I always thought he shoulda say “stay awake” not “stay awoke” because it fits the ryhme scheme better, it rhymes with “snake “ which he already said and it flows better into the next part of the sentence. But, “stay awoke” carries a heavier meaning and P was a deep thinker and way ahead of the times, so it makes sense he said that instead

Your change does fit the internal rhyme scheme better. Not only does awake rhyme with "snake" in the first line, you also create assonance with the repetition of the "ay" sound: "Stay awake to the ways." That would have also been better alliteration with the "T" sound in stay, which precedes the "w / way" sounds in "awake," ways" and "wickedest."

But u right about the "stay woke" having heavier meaning so I ain't mad it.

 

[Avisible Man]

I been listening to the new Banks COTI 2. He's got a great song on there with Benny The Butcher coming, nikka! It's called "Living Proof." The lines in question:



You probably makin' bread, but don't know how to stack it, do you? (Nah)
I make fifty bands and still go home to a pack of noodles
Had the best work, then got a net worth that they had to Google
I promise that I'll be richer by the time I run back into you, uh

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This comes down to me not really pronouncing the long o sound in you. I will almost always say "ya" instead. With that in mind, I woulda changed what Benny said to this:

You probably makin' bread, but don't know how to stack it, do ya? (Nah)
I make fifty bands and still go home to a can of tuna
Had the best work, then got a net worth that they had to Google
I promise that I'll be richer by the time I run back into you, uh

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Changing "you" to "ya" is critical here cuz it allows us to form a couplet / double end rhyme with "ya" and "tuna." Tuna is also cheap like noodles so we preserve the meaning of Benny's message.

Going from a "pack" of noodles to a "can" of tuna allows us to create an internal rhyme with the fifty "bands." "Bands" and "can" arent perfect rhymes but the "an" sound is the same so we create a slant rhyme.

Benny's "noodles" and getting a net worth they had to "Google" is slick. Still tho, it's not a perfect rhyme. It's a slant rhyme. A damn good one too. I hate to do it but he still maintains the couplet with the rhyming "Google" and "into you" to end the next line. Again, that's more to do with the assonance of the long o sound.

Still dope tho the way he said it but I do legitimately think my way woulda been better.